Staff | Head Admin
Byakuya Kuchiki
|
| | Primera Redo ((Done)) | |
| | Author | Message |
---|
Guest Guest
| Subject: Primera Redo ((Done)) Thu Mar 24, 2011 6:19 pm | |
| Code: Basic InformationName: Raiden Kiyade Real Age: 2,411 Appeared Age: 37Gender: Male . Rank: Espada Number: 1 Hollow Hole: Left side of chest where the heart would be Mask Fragment: On both sides of Daniels Face andon his bottom lip and chin Number Tattoo:On the left side of Daniels neck Appearance:- Spoiler:
Daniel as yellow pupils with white eyes, Silver Hair, Stading at 6'5, weighting 189 lbs. The picture explains the rest Personal InformationLikes/Dislikes: Likes:
Fighting: Daniel finds Fightning somthing like a sport. Grown up from a violent tendisys.. he gains a mental advantage as his loathing for battle makes him agile for war.
Violence: the site of blood and murder makes Daniel crave a sence of war.. getting into battle more he understands and respects the art of war.
Power: Daniel craves for the high amount of power from being his rank of the espada.. he doesnt want the cero spot.. he wants the respect of being high class.
Dislikes:
Peace: Daniel doesnt see the point in "Peace" when he belives its what cause so much death within the world.
Life: Daniels heart has grown cold to anything that breaths.. his lonsome life within the white desert has strayed him away from his old instincts. Strength/Weaknesses:
Strengths
Sonido/Speed Master: From being a Lightning Espada.. his speed is blinding.. being a sonido master and a agility master.. Daniel is hard to face off against just to his immense speed. Daniel was grown up off his own training..
High Lightning Reitsu Master: Daniel has embraced his reitsu type nd mastered it.. making his reitsu level Quite high.. his high reitsu levels is nothing compared to the Ceros.. but it is right underneath.. the second strongest within the Hucho Mundo.
Extra Hard Heirro: Daniels Heirro underneath his cloak.. makes his skin one of the strongest of the Espadas.. maybe even the hardest. But only Ranks out Ranking the Primera can cut through it.
Master Kenjutsu Stylist: From 2 thousand years of pure training.. Daniel is one of the Strongest Kenjutsu masters within the Hucho Mundo
Weakness
Low Strength: Daniel has trained his speed to such a high degree he isnt very strong...
Low Attention span: Daniel often has tendacy to stray off.. making him board
Hates being Board: Once Daniel becomes board he starts to make mistakes..
Annoying: He hates annoying people.. it pisses him off and makes him want to kill
Personality: Daniel is quiet, Wise, and very expeirenced fighter... He tends to speak only when needed but in situations Daniel can become quite intimidating Sexual Orientation: Straight Relationship Status: Single and looking..? Resurrecion InformationName: Sujou of Sono Raikou Washi ((Birth of the Lightning Eagle)) Represent: Eagle Family: Lightning Looks: - Spoiler:
But added on to the Picture two Solid White wings form off Daniels back, the wing having the same arrancar armor as Daniels skin. Daniels Blade also Changing into a Giant red blade the red blade full of vains of blue lightning streaks. TechniquesBasic High Ranked Arrancar Techniques- Spoiler:
Name: Garganta - (Throat) State: Both Description: Garganta is how Arrancar move to and from Hueco Mundo. It literally tears open the dimensional fabric separating the worlds, revealing a tunnel of whirling, torrential energy that must be focused and solidified to create a discernible pathway
Name: Hierro - (Iron) State: Both Description: Hierro refers to the hardened skin of the Arrancar, which is a result of their compressed spiritual power. While their skin is strong enough to block even released Zanpakutō bare-handed, it is by no means impenetrable. Stronger Arrancar have proportionally stronger skin.
Name: Pesquisa - (Inquiry) State: Both Description: Pesquisa is the Arrancar equivalent of the Shinigami ability to sense Spiritual Pressure. It functions similar to a sonar. Using Pesquisa requires most Espada to enter a meditative state.
Name: Sonído - (Sound) State: Both Description: Sonido is the Arrancar equivalent of the Shinigami Flash Steps and the Quincy Hirenkyaku; it allows the user to travel at incredibly high speeds for short distances. Use of Sonído is punctuated by a brief static sound, in contrast to the "swish" sound used for Flash Steps.
Name: Bala - (Bullet) State: Both Description: Bala is an Arrancar alternative to Cero. The technique hardens the user's Spiritual Pressure and fires it like a bullet. Although it is weaker than a normal Cero, it moves about twenty times faster and can be fired at a much higher rate, but the damage is much the same. Stronger Arrancar can also fire a more powerful Bala, while retaining its twenty-fold speed.
Name: Cero - (Zero) State: Both Description: Cero is a high-powered energy blasts that can be fired from various body parts, such as mouth, tongue, hand or fingers.
Name: Gran Rey Cero - (Grand King Zero) State: Both Description: GRC is a much stronger Cero.To perform this potent variation of the Cero, the Arrancar first draws blood from the Cero-generating appendage using his or her Zanpakutō, then charges the Cero while mixing the blood with it. The result is a Cero with a much greater attack power and speed, as well as a change of color unique to the Espada. History and RP Sample The New Primera Abilitys - Spoiler:
Name: Lightning Cero State: both Description: Holding his hand to the air.. a bolt of lightning comes down striking into Daniels palm, His reitsu swirls in his palm producing electrcity.. ehods he hand out.. and instead of a raw power attack.. he is struck once more and the bolt of lightning travels trough Daniels am into th cero sparking it off rediecting the lightning bolt and mixing it with the Cero.. its extreamly fast, but small.. made to cause a very quick peircing attack.. not a killing strike. Can be blocked.. but near impossible to dodge Drawbacks/cooldown: once every three posts with a 2 post cool down
Name: Lightning Needle Barrage State: both Description: A bolt of lightning comes down from the sky, forming reitsu around Daniels body.. the lightning bolt hits Reitsu.. forming into it sending sparks into the air. Hold his hand up the sparks form together using the reitsu.. it creates 40 of them.. that float infront of Daniels hand. Once Daniel waves them forward they fly quickly in the direction he wave them. this can be dodged, and blocked Drawbacks/cooldown:once a post with a 4 post cool down
Name: Winged Raiton Eagle Strike State:Released Description: By swinging his blade, Daniel draw Reitsu through the veins on his Released blade.. Lightning mixed with Reitsu forms into it sending a Strike out of the blade similars to Ichigos Tetsuga Attack. Being a Lighting attack.. its very quick making it Dodgeable but very hard to block. The strike is a Silver mixed with a Deep blue, extending 26 feet and 4 feet thick. If it hits dead on it can cause saver burns.. and if close enough can even sheer through a body. It can be used twice a post. Drawbacks/cooldown: No drawbacks, but it has a 1 post cool down.
Name: Eagle Lightning Sonido State: Released Description: Daniel being a sonido master, he uses this tech by a sudden lightning bolt hitting him, he uses the energy and Sonidos the speed of lightning. Wich is Instentanious.. making it 10x faster then a regular Sonido. Drawbacks/cooldown: once a post.. and has no cooldown
Name: Finishing Raiton Release State: Released Description:Daniels Ritsu soars off his body going into the sky.. the high aount of reitsu draws in clouds that swirl around the stream of Reitsu. Only able to be used once a every time he is in his Released state. A giant bolt of lightning comes down hitting Daniels body.. the high amount of energy being deliverd into his body Makes close combat Dangerous with Daniel as he radiates a high amount of electricity. Once the Release is used.. Daniels speed is increased immensly, and his Hierro is also.. making it like shure diamond. Drawbacks/cooldown: once a fight, and last for 3 posts.. then dys off
Name: Released Raiton Gran Ray Cero State: Released Description: Daniel holding his hand up.. forming enough reitsu for a gran Ray Cero.. a bolt of lightning crashs down into the spiraling Cero.. giving it a high amount of energy.. but instead of a quick attack.. he bonds the lightning into the Reitsu.. once the attack hits anything.. being a Gran Ray Cero.. it implodes on its self sending out lightning bolt soaring out of it.. connecting to anything that draws stadic.. wich is metal, Electricity inside a body, anything that conducts it. the lightning is just a small proportion of the Damage the gran ray cero can do Drawbacks/cooldown:once a post.. and has a 6 post cool down
[ b]History:Daniel was a low class arrancar.. a eagle eagle gliding in the sky.. he was not much to thing of being a adjucas. Daniel one day landing near a man.. the man looking like a Shinigami.. hereached twords Daniel.. speaking softly into Daniels ears.. he held a gem to Daniels chest. Daniel squirming his body went through a drastic change.. himself.. a lonesome Hollow.. had now become, somthing.. a human?.. no.. Shinigami? He didnt know. Standing lost in time Daniel woundered. Wanting to be somthing he was not.. he just woundered. Soon many years.. so many Daniels days just passed him. He stumbled upon the site of the Hucho Mundo.. the huge collosium. Aizen.. the one who had changed him.. was being taken.. Daniel just woundering.. a shinigami had found him. Daniel looking he was naturaly talented in fight. The end battle Daniel won.. He woundered through the Hucho.. A blade on his left hip from the time Daniel had became an Arrancar. A dying Epada member looked at Daniel as he was not expecting anyone.. he spoke " Run Arrancar, learn your abilitys" Daniel had trained for years.. learning his abilitys he Had become strong. Though after all these years.. Daniel has now approached back.. ready to make a change. Not much is known About Daniel as his past has been blurred.. ((I dont wanna fill this out))[/b] ( [b]RP Sample: - Spoiler:
Abaron waste land of a city lyed domant.. a league of refugee shinigami where dwelling within the city. A feeling of pure darkness lifted upon the air.. as a Hole known as a Garganta slid open in mid air, a hand lifted out gripping tot he side of the garganta it pulled open. The site of a Figure, his foot stepping outside of the garganta. A figure standing 6'5 inches, cloaked in a white cloak with a black collar lifted up, his sleeves extending down tohis fingers skin tight, his finger tips where black, his legs haning a poofed out on his thys tightening onto his knees as a black sock connected to the end of the pants. Daniels silver hair strayed against the wind.. his cloak gleeming to the left.. he slid his hand across the hole sealing it. Daniels blade on his left hip he stood looking over the city. But as his Garganta closed.. the sprital pressure coming from his body exsurted outwards, Shaking the ground of the city Daniel look over without emotion speaking
In a time on peace... is a time for war. May the mercy of life dawn upon you.. and the wrath of hate come down on you.. You shinigami are the anger inside that feeds the fire for my hatred.. now it is time for me to Show you the power of the Espada to its absolute
Daniels eyes gleeming into a form of pure blue mixed with silver.. the Reitsu picking up like a signal Daniels body radiated with energy it exploded from his body.. his reitsu extending up into the air. His raw energy putting him as one of the Strongest. he looked down upon the city lifting his hand up.. A bolt of lightning forming from the cluds came down striking into Daniels palm.. his body thrusting forward using a sonido.. he appeared on top of one of the roofs of a building. His pure energy turning the top of the building to ruble as he feet hit it. The roof caving in on Daniel he stood above it looking up only to see a Shinigami infront of him
"I will not watch this city go to waste! ill kill you ARRANCAR!"
Daniel turning himself to face dirctly infront of this puny Thing infront of him. The shinigami charging Daniel with full force he came soaring at Daniel striking his blade down twords Daniels body. Daniel holding a straight face as he did his blade came down skidding across Daniels chest. Tearing his cloths scratching Daniels skin. Daniel slightly chuckled as he stepped forward.. he right hand lifting down as if he was going to grab his blade he came up with a back handed fist. The fist sliding into the Shinigamis face it sent him soaring through several building before coming to a hault.
Daniel pushed off his right foot, using another sonido he appeared above the shinigami speaking
"Your foolish.. if i had time to toy with you i would.. but now.. your fate is chosen
Holding his hand forward aimed at the Shinigamis chest.. he slightly smirk as a barrage o balas came flying out of Daniels hand. Beating the shinigami deeper and deeper into the ruble he layed in. Reaching his hand down Daniel picked he shinigami up by his torn cloths.. holding him up.. he looked dead into his eyes.. the Shinigamis body mangled in scratches and blood.
"I am Numero 1 of the Espada boy.. I am Daniel Kiyade the carryer of you pathdic life.. now.. your last words will be silence... the exact same place your resting place will be
Daniel said whispering into the shinigamis ear.. he lifted him up slowly dropping him infront of Daniels foot, Daniel came around kicking his body through the air sending him into the building Daniel had landed on previously. the sound of a building crashing down echoing through city. Daniel floating into the air.. he feet planted as if he were standing on the ground in mid air. Towering over the city.. he looked in shame.. Holding his right hand into the air once more.. his reitsu began to rise once more.. a bolt striking into his palm once more.. he held his hand down twords where the knocked out shinigami lyed. A crackling sound could be heard as a swarm of Reitsu came twirling into Daniels right palm.. the sprital pressure shattering the city windows.. the crackling sound growing louder.. the reitsu formed a ball in Daniels palm..
"Gran ray Cero" Daniel spoke under his breath.. a sound of a explotion as Daniels reitsu exsurted in such a degree 2 building under him hand blew out the roofs of the buildings in a circular manner.. Daniel drawing in his reitsu.. bolt of lightning formed off his body connecting to metal objects underneath him.. the bolts happening rapidly he spoke once more
"Time for shock and awe to come forth on this day.. may someone who cares have mercy on your soul
Shinigami around the city to frightened watched the Arrancar prepare to destroy.. and murder. the Shinigami lying in the ruble of the destroyed building could only watch and see his death right above him.
Suddenly a silence came over the city.. for a split moment.. it became peacfull.. then. The crashing sound came forth, the ball within Daniels hand let go of a giant blast.. coming out of the ball in Daniels hand. the blast soaring down crashing into the destroyed building.. it hit.. a lift of reitsu came out as an explotion happened the ground underneath Daniel picking up as the cero finished.. a Dome of Reitsu came up extending soaring and destroying the inner core of the city. The dome extending out rapidly kept going.. destroying everything within its path.
Daniel Stood above the destruction.. only insanity taking over.. he could only help to laugh at the huge amount of destruction happening. The people in the way being pick up.. by the Reitsu... the brightness of the dome ejecting a light that could be seen for miles. Lightning formed out of the dome.. hitting into building not being hit.. more of them capsized.. some even connecting to Daniels aura.. Daniel placed his hands in his pockets. the Dome.. caving in exploding once more.. it left nothing but destruction. Daniel floated over a giant crater underneath him.. Only a few building on the edge of the crater were still standing... Daniel floated down landing in the center on the crater.. only to find his opponents sword lying in black dust. Daniels reign was not over.. a small degree of what he truly is was shown today.. and pure evil was left over. Daniels eyes gleeming with reitsu shined yellow.. his eyes looking as is he were a demon.. but who knows.. maybe he is.
[b]
Last edited by Daniel Kiyade on Thu Mar 24, 2011 7:27 pm; edited 5 times in total |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Thu Mar 24, 2011 6:24 pm | |
| What is this? You don't need to do this, you're already approved and your previous character was just fine! |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Thu Mar 24, 2011 6:26 pm | |
| I got permisson, and i want to. |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Thu Mar 24, 2011 7:18 pm | |
| Bump
Im done With the Edit |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Thu Mar 24, 2011 10:43 pm | |
| |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Thu Mar 24, 2011 11:40 pm | |
| Don't bump we work as fast as we can.
Why did you do this? |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Fri Mar 25, 2011 12:15 pm | |
| Cause i didnt know the restrictions on abilitys, strength, and weakness's. So i asked Byakuya if i could edit, got permisson and i did |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Fri Mar 25, 2011 9:35 pm | |
| ~ Winged Raiton Eagle Strike: Since you can use it twice a post give it a 3 turn cooldown
~ Eagle Lightning Sonido: 10x faster then a normal soindo is a bit much how about 5. Also since this is an enhanced Sonido and using your lighting its needs a cooldown. I was thinking like 3 or 4 but if you agree to lower the speed to 3X the cooldown will be 1 or 2 turns.
~ Finishing Raiton Release: Your Hierro can be cut by blades sharpened with reiatsu, other then that is's all good. Small suggestion you don't have to do this: if you remove the speed the usage can be bumped up to 6 post
~ Released Raiton Gran Ray Cero: 4 post cooldown because 6 is kind of much for a move like this.
~ Overall: Please don't use all you moves in the same post. |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sat Mar 26, 2011 2:31 am | |
| - Nishi wrote:
- ~ Winged Raiton Eagle Strike: Since you can use it twice a post give it a 3 turn cooldown No problem 3 turn c/d is good
~ Eagle Lightning Sonido: 10x faster then a normal soindo is a bit much how about 5. Also since this is an enhanced Sonido and using your lighting its needs a cooldown. I was thinking like 3 or 4 but if you agree to lower the speed to 3X the cooldown will be 1 or 2 turns. Thats good with me 3x with 1 post cooldown
~ Finishing Raiton Release: Your Hierro can be cut by blades sharpened with reiatsu(Yup thats perfetly fine), other then that is's all good. Small suggestion you don't have to do this: if you remove the speed the usage can be bumped up to 6 post No i will keep it as it is with the speed
~ Released Raiton Gran Ray Cero: 4 post cooldown because 6 is kind of much for a move like this. Thank you, i just didnt want to god-mod
~ Overall: Please don't use all you moves in the same post. |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sat Mar 26, 2011 11:26 am | |
| |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:10 pm | |
| Still a poor profile. But since you were approved, I will give you the rank you deserve.
Power Level: B-2 |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:33 pm | |
| wtf do you want me to do.. to get this god damn app to a appropriate level of a Primera? |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:39 pm | |
| Learn how to write. Maybe get a passing grade in english class.
Not that hard, right? And B rank IS espada rank, and the primera is espada, so I think its fair. Your app is not based solely on your rank. Cero is different because he is the hollow king technically.
Thanks for reading buddy. |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:48 pm | |
| wow.. are you fucking kidding me.. i understand the rank im fine with that? But befor you go and start to insult my intelligence ask why I have a PEICE O SHIT computer thats so fuking slow.. i cant type a sentance without it skipping letters. So "Lucifer" befor you insult my intelligence. Did you know "Lucifer" means the bringer of light? Because he was the most loved angel by god himself. So when you want a character to be truly dark.. try learning your history. also FYI it would be Satan that would make you a Satanic Arrancar dipshit.. not lucifer |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:50 pm | |
| ENOUGH
both of you stop this right now, neither of you are supposed to comment on an already approved app, unless lucifer gives a rank. now stop this or you will be breaking the rules -_- |
| | | Byakuya Kuchiki Admin
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sun Mar 27, 2011 9:23 am | |
| Is this approved or not? If not, STOP moving it. | |
| | | Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) Sun Mar 27, 2011 11:47 am | |
| it IS approved and I moved it once. |
| | | Sponsored content
| Subject: Re: Primera Redo ((Done)) | |
| |
| | | | Primera Redo ((Done)) | |
|
Similar topics | |
|
| Permissions in this forum: | You cannot reply to topics in this forum
| |
| |
| |